Poem for English :o?

-Back At'Cha-

I'm sorry to hear, my darling dear, everyone's throwing their **** at you

I thought, bad thoughts, I never thought I'd get this view

Tell me again why I should ever set you free

When you know you never really never cared about me

Four years, hundred calls, way too long ago

I thought, I didn't beleieve, I would hit such a new low

Can you tell me why I should help you in your time of need

When half the time, you know, you forgot about me

Long days, no one ever says what you should've done

But now you remember that I wasn't there for fun

Everything crashes down in a bitter symphony

Maybe you should've thought deeper into you an me

Back then, crying by the phone, you never gave a damn

By now crying in the rain, wishing for a hand

Tell me why I should come and cater you

When all along, I always thought I was the fool

Feel free to edit and repost with your comments, it'll save me time of having t

Poem for English :o?ballet theater

Its a good piece....and it fits best to be a song rather than a poem...its tone is that of a good lyric...i think you should consider this to make a song...and the rhymes are all a perfect match...

and these two lines are excellent!

"Everything crashes down in a bitter symphony

Maybe you should've thought deeper into you an me"

and they show your potential as a poet! just brilliant are they!!

in total it is a good work...

so keep writing and i am sure you will improve a lot more in future...you have that skill in you...

Good Luck!

Poem for English :o?chicago theater opera theater

if your gonna turn this in cut the bad words (even though they tie everything toghther) but otherwise its good! good luck